Farmer Berkshire By: Samantha Heytler
1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 This story was well written and had alot of detail. I give Farmer Berkshire 5 stars and a 10 rating beacuse it was a very good story and I understood how they felt. I could picture Mr. Fisher screaming at the kids. You could even picture the time maachine.
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Cousin Grim By: Curtis Fischer
1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 This story was good and it kindoff made sense but it still got of topic. I give Cousin Grim 4 stars and a 10 rating. The story had good detail and was scary. Thats a good book.

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Third Hour By: Amber Ann Abboud
1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 This story was ok and had llots of detail but didnt make sense. I give Third Hour by Amber Ann Abboud 3 stars and a 6 rating.
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The Mystery Cases of Valerie & Herlock By: Victoria Lucas
1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 This story didnt really make sense but had detail. It got of topic alot but I liked the action. I give The Mystery Cases of Valerie & Herlock 2 stars and a 4 rating.
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Chk, chk, chk. Nice rail slide dude! Thanks!(You need to add quotation marks) Paul, Carl, Twix, Rolo, and Nyan just finished a great day at the skate park. They went home to get some snacks. After their snacks they went outside to the driveway and played some basketball. Twix accidentally left his skateboard on the driveway, Rolo tripped on the board fell back and the ball went flying out of his hands. Paul, Carl, Twix, Rolo, and Nyan watched the ball swish into the net. They all went crazy. Then Rolo had an amazing idea. What if we make a trick shooting team? Who will be in it?(more quotation marks) Asked Paul. Everyone will be in it said Rolo. Cool (more quotation marks) the rest of them agreed. They go to THE STORE the next day and buy some basketballs so they can practice new trick shots. They started off just throwing basketballs at the walls and making it rickashade(ricochet) off of everything from walls to the ground. By noon they have already made ever(delete space)y shot they took. They were having a great day. They were starving. They asked Carl’s mom if they could make some lunch. She said yes and they went to the kitchen and made peanut butter and nutella with marshmallows. They ate them quick(ly) and went back to the skate park. They were thinking of more ideas for new trick shots. Then thought what if we make the new summer Olympic biathlon. The sports they would be combining are Skateboarding and basketball. They go to the Olympic committee the next day and ask if there sport can come a reality. The Olympic committee says this is a good idea. But they said that they need a demo of them playing the sport. They say ok and they go home to make the demo. They need to be careful because they don’t want to get injured. They start playing and after 45 min the demo is done. They come in the house with a few bumps and broses(bruises). But the worst injury was Nyan’s scraped knee. They had to clean it up and put a band aid on it and he was fine. They return the demo to the committee the next day and they said great all you need to do is come up with a name by tomorrow and your good. Cool they agree(more quotation marks). On the ride back they agreed to call it Rideboard.

David and Brendan
We liked that they came up with a new sport. Your were missing the details of the time when they were making the demo.